this is really cute. I love the line style. I think the main problem is his head is cropped off a little to small. The eyes should be in the center of the head, so his head should end about where the top most spikes start. next time maybe fluff the hair out more?
You have really beautiful lines though. keep it up.
Ooh I really like this. I love the lines in the shading on his cheek and neck. They're so pretty and fun to look at. And I can tell that you used Cloud. Sora's nose and the shape of his face looks like Cloud's in Advent Children.